18 September 2009

Today, we worked on the script, since Jonathan had failed to do so. Progress was moderate. I wrote up most of the script, but left out the dialogue, preferring to allow Lucas to do that as he was best at dialogue. However, he was sick. The deadline is beginning to draw near, and there is no sign that there is any planning occuring.

We wrote up the plans of last lesson to rewrite the script slightly to include more of a twist, and a more voluntary feme fatale that had characteristics of the good woman as well. Also, we toned down the man's crime to something more evil and dirty, rather than a good cause, so as to make the man more morally ambiguous. I think that the improvements are good, but in the spirit of the original. Also, the lengthy and unnecessary act 2 was cut. I feel this was correct: the film will be too long and we haven't time.

Film noir synopsis

A man, a former policeman, who divorced not of his own will, and who still loves his ex-wife, watches his ex-wife change jobs and work as a secretary under a very beautiful woman (Feme fatale), with whom he begins to fall in love. His ex-wife then dies, and he begins to investigate the cause of death. During this time, he begins to get involved with the feme fatale, but she is married to a jealous husband. Eventually the husband of the feme fatale dies and the protagonist discovers that it was the feme fatale that killed both his ex-wife and the husband in order so that they may get married.