18 September 2009

Today, we worked on the script, since Jonathan had failed to do so. Progress was moderate. I wrote up most of the script, but left out the dialogue, preferring to allow Lucas to do that as he was best at dialogue. However, he was sick. The deadline is beginning to draw near, and there is no sign that there is any planning occuring.

We wrote up the plans of last lesson to rewrite the script slightly to include more of a twist, and a more voluntary feme fatale that had characteristics of the good woman as well. Also, we toned down the man's crime to something more evil and dirty, rather than a good cause, so as to make the man more morally ambiguous. I think that the improvements are good, but in the spirit of the original. Also, the lengthy and unnecessary act 2 was cut. I feel this was correct: the film will be too long and we haven't time.